Voice
Assignment 5/13
2. What
effect does this structure and repetition in the first passage have on the reader?
The writer used short sentances and lots of easy adjectives to help the reader engage on how the classroom is. The writer doesn't say it directly, but we as readers can assume that the children are younger because of the immautrity of their actions.Using the syntax the writer used, like using many periods instead of just making a longer sentance with commas, it makes the scene seem more insane. If the writer used commas, the scene would still seem crazy, but not as crazy as using periods, because periods add a sence of urgency if used in quick, short sentances.
6.
What is the tone of EACH passage?
How do you know?
The tone in the first passage at the
beginning was wild and crazy. The children were out of control, and even their teacher could not control them. She was feeling stressed and decided to leave. The end of the passage was frightening and tense. There was a new teacher who would actually get the kids in trouble if they did not listen, unlike Miss Nelson, and the childeren where scared of her. They listened even on the first time she asked them to do something.
The tone in the second passage was intimidated. The main character had been best friend with a girl in the past, and now she changed and the main character did not know if she liked the change or not. She intimidates the main character because she wears smudgy make-up, tries to smoke, and just acts totally different. The main character talks to herself in the passsage and tell herself to "be cool". She is kind of frightened by her even though they ussed to know eachother so well.
7. Characterize or explain the voice of your creative non-fiction piece so
far. How do you know? How would we know
it is YOUR piece? What purposeful choices have you made to create voice? Is
this a strength or weakness of your writing?
The voice in my non-fiction piece so far is astonished. I know this because in many parts of my story I say how stupid people can be and how I can't believe people could do these kind of things. I was just astonished. People would know that this is my piece because I use a variety of super short paragraphs/sentances and I also use all capital letters for some of my words to make an exclaimation more meaningful. I use a lot of voice in my passage to try to make the reader more engaged and to make the reader relate to how I feel. I believe the way I add voice in my writing makes my writing stronger so I would say it is a strength.
